Truth is walked up the scaffold,
In the shadows I saw you,
Watching me.
Looking to see what I hold,
Close to my heart true,
As You know I do not see.
A mask we hide,
But Death’s dream kingdom,
Has laid claim to us all,
Like tower of Babel,
Together we will certainly fall.
The blood dimmed tide,
Washed up the shore,
All the strivings of our hands,
Without a mask to hide, we are no more.
To all this our hands, ring the joyful bell.
—-
******“ It so nice to see you, are you doing alright?’
******“Just fine we got a house two cars and a dog, (never mind the divorce settlement, drug strung kid in discontent, or the neighbor who can’t make the rent,) Yeah living high on the hog, we should meet again…”
ἀκούσας δὲ ὁ νεανίσκος τὸν λόγον ἀπῆλθεν λυπούμενος, ἦν γὰρ ἔχων κτήματα πολλά.
—–
My fingers are rotting,
Sores that will not heal, Stinging
Numbness and I cannot feel,
I am nothing I am me.
Yet hope is in the whispers,
I set my eyes to Galilee
I, among other lepers,
Looking for the Son of Man.
-js
Notes:
First off, this is not meant to bash America. I love my country that is why i will freely critique some of our social norms.
Tower or Babel, see Genesis 11:1-9. They thought they could build the perfect world with their own effort.
Poems Alluded to: “The Present Crisis” By James Lowe. He wrote in the 19th century when America was making gains by exploiting slaves. (Currently, Coacoa from West Africa is harvested by slaves, makes it pretty important to know if the company supply chain is fair traded.) Who is the “you” I referred to?
“The Hollow Men” T.S. Eliot. “The Second Coming” by W.B. Yeats refers to our desperate attempt to get more, we destroy the innocent and beautiful.
The Greek Translation is a qoute from Matthew 19:22. “When the young man heard this, he went away sad because he had great wealth.”
In 1st century palestine, lepers were social outcasts who knew they needed help and things were seriously wrong. They could not kid themselves, because they felt it painfully in the disease and social stigma everyday of their life.
What are some of your comments?
June 2nd, 2010 at 7:49 am
Wow! The way you broke away from the form of the poem with the dialog really drove this poem home and gave it that extra sting. It can be so easy to get lost in the words of the poem and forget that your original destination was the meaning. I think the way you created that break not only brought the reader back to the message but also expanded upon and accentuated the layering you have going on.
June 3rd, 2010 at 5:41 am
Thanks Lauren, your comments are always so uplifting and in depth. I really do appreciate the insight. :]
June 3rd, 2010 at 2:30 pm
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June 3rd, 2010 at 5:41 pm
Yes, I agree – this way nicely broken up.
June 4th, 2010 at 1:27 am
I can’t find a word that seems right. Sometimes the words are just so powerful they need nothing added. This is masterful.
June 4th, 2010 at 8:07 am
that was wicked cool…i echo the sentimets that we have strayed from the path with much of our dream seeking ways…fall oh tower, fall.
June 4th, 2010 at 8:41 am
thanks guys for the comments:]
June 4th, 2010 at 9:05 am
Nicely done– and the “Hollow Men” quote a v.cool touch!
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June 4th, 2010 at 3:26 pm
Dude. This is so sweet, I can’t even–
Dude.
I love all the literary allusions, biblical references, etc. “The Second Coming” is one of my favorites; it’s so ominous… Anyway, awesome poem.
June 5th, 2010 at 2:31 am
“The Second coming” is one of my favorites too. thanks for the feedback:]
June 4th, 2010 at 7:45 pm
this is really good
June 6th, 2010 at 1:26 am
very beautiful piece.